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  • marina57v больше недели назад

    You have received a letter from your English-speaking pen-friend Bill who writes:

    I don’t think it will be a problem for me to choose a good job in the future as I’m really interested in foreign languages, cultures and countries and I hope I’ll work as a translator or teacher of foreign languages some day. Have you already decided on your career? What job are you going to choose? Why?
    I’ve lived in the USA my whole life but I’d really love to travel to other countries.

    9 August 2013

    Dear Bill,
    I was very glad to get your letter. It is great that you have determined with your future job. I have decided on my career too. In future I plan to become a chemist. I am very interested in science and I want to contribute to its development. In addition to it I want to make people closer to science by writing books and articles.
    As for your desire to travel. What countries are you going to visit? How would you like to travel? Are you going to go sight-seeing or to get acquaint with countries’ wild life and natural wonders?
    Sorry, but my mum is calling me. Hope to hear from you soon.
    Best wishes,

  • Streit (Страйт) Мария больше недели назад

    Лучше будет "decided on your future job" (ка вы писали в след. предложении!)

    Tакже лучше будет "in addition to that I want to help people understand it" (или help people use it more often, get better acquainted with it)

    Еще лучше соединить 'As for your desire to travel, what countries are you going to visit?', раз "as for your desire to travel" не полноценное предложение.

    *get acquainted with the countries' wild life and natural wonders? (Я лично перефразировала бы, сказала бы например "Are you just going sight-seeing or did you have some other goal in mind?", но не хочу сильно менять ваш оригинал)

    Лучше будет "Got to go, my mum is calling me" (Ну я сказала бы mom, но это уже американский английский ;) )

    В целом молодец, ошибок очень мало, всего 'get acquaint with'!


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